A spot
Birch, moss, cover
Cringing, biding, holding
Down in the hole
I revel in the peaceful open, finished, and find my way back.
I wanted this poem to be more up to interpretation. It is actually for August when there are many camping trips that do not have civilized washrooms. It is always very difficult for me to enter a pit toilet without feeling too ill to finish business. Instead, I end up going far far away somewhere without having to worry about any unexpected visitors or putrid smells. This poem is called an ABC poem. It generally has 5 lines, although one can use the whole alphabet. Due to the shortness of the poem, using poetic devices would infringe on my freedom with the writing.
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Good poem... funny idea to it because I've been in the same situation.
ReplyDeleteI like the ABC style, and how even though you didn't use poetic devices it was poetic by it being sort of ambiguous.
Yeah like Alex said it's a very interesting topic to write a poem about. Also a style of poetry i've never before seen/heard of. I'm confused though, because your fifth line starts with an "I". Shouldn't it start with the letter "E" to maintain it's alphabeticalness?
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Hahahhaha, I will never forget that trip and this is a hilarious poem! But you've definitely accomplished your goal: this poem seems very vague and ambiguous and a reader can certainly interpret in ANY way they want. Someone might even think that you're talking about a quiet spot that you like to sit down and think! I also really like the idea of an ABC poem.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, Rache!
A short and humorous poem! I agree that the poem sounds the best as it is and that extra poetic devices are detrimental to the effect of poem. I think it was concise and straightforward. ABC poems are quite fun and its an interesting poetic form, and I think you did a great job on your ABC poem!
ReplyDeleteSimple and humourous, really shows how distanced from nature our society has become, with all our computers and such. Clever, Rachel!
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Haha, great poem! It is very funny and true. It really paints a descriptive picture and the poem is very relatable, for better or worse. I like this ABC kind of poem. Good job!!
ReplyDeleteGood poem! Without the explication, the poem was very universal, but with it, a good bout of humour was added! I like the ABC style, very creative!
ReplyDeletei agree with what most people said, this poem is very simply, but can be interpreted as something very universal! It was humorous and a unique kind of poem that would definetly intrigue any reader. I do agree, the alphabet thing kinda threw me off at first, but then it got me thinking that maybe you did that on purpose! it was a great poem!
ReplyDeleteOh I like this! This happens to me all the time when I go fishing or camping! I like lines 2-3 because of the single words use - it makes it strong!
ReplyDeleteWow Rachel! This poem is good, but what's even better is that it is ambiguous and just as you intended, up for interpretation. Everything led me to think of a paranoid worm. Good job!
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